I’m supposed to be editing.
But I’ve hit another sticking point.
Too many options, that’s the problem. It’s like those choose-your-own-adventure books. I could take the same starting point and end up with the hero and heroine at a hundred different destinations. Every step along the way, they are making decisions, and each decision could open up a different set of options.
I just realised that the heroine actually has all the power in the situation. The hero needs her, no way around it, and she knows it. Now if she was a different sort of woman, she would use that as some sort of bargaining or blackmail weapon. But she’s not that sort of woman, and how to do that without de-Alphaing him anyway? I need to think through what the story I am trying to create here really is.
I really don’t know, and that’s most of my problem. I’m trying to edit this mess of a first draft into something I can submit to Presents if I am lucky enough to get a full request. But after the last posting, I realised I really want to do this as a single title type thing, with some magical realism thrown in, to play up the fairy tale aspects of it all.
Not even the LBD version, “A Modern Girl’s Guide to Being a Princess”, with the Grace Kelly film references; but to go wild with an insane fairy tale mix, enchanted palace, talking animals and all.
The discipline of doing it as a Presents will be good for me. But I’m not convinced my premise totally works, as the possible plot hole I just discovered shows. Well, it’s not really a plot hole, I guess. But I do have to show that they are both aware of it, realise it gives her the control in the situation, while maintaining his total Alphaness. She loses out unless she does what he wants her to, so she needs to go along with him. It’s a matter of whether she chooses to make him suffer a bit in the meantime. I don’t think she will. But she does need to let him know she knows that she could, if she wanted to. Actually, it could be a good opportunity to show more of the hero’s motivation.
Yes, figured it out, I hope! Okay, keep going, write this story as a Presents. Even though the more I read of it the more I can’t help thinking that if it belongs with Harlequin Mills and Boon at all, it’s a Sweet Romance.
But if I get an R from the competition, I’m going to really let rip with this story as a crazy magical realism fairy tale romance!